One answer and more questions

My good friend and fellow aspiring author told me straight that she didn’t think I needed to improve on my story The End Solution and that it stands alone very well. I think I’ll take that advice for now and take a look at it in a few months time. Maybe I’ll have a concrete idea of what to do with it next after father time goes nuts.

As for what I’m doing right now, that would be editing Town of the Mountain. Now this process has allowed me to flesh out some of the characters back story and some of their front story (see what I did there). I’m currently working on Eriden, the only female of the five hunters, and her budding relationship with Clifton who used to go out with Markus’s current girlfriend Darling Bloomflower. This is giving me a bit of headache as I don’t know how much detail I should use. What do you think? Less is more or less is crap? (if that all sounded confusing READ THE STORY)

I’m also looking forward to turning one of the hunters against the rest of them. Not in a ‘he/she joins the bad guys way’ but in that eventually they will all think of him as a great hunter but as a complete arse hole when he’s not hunting and completely untrustworthy. How I get to that point should be interesting as I’m making it up as I go along.

That’s it for now and as always your comments are very welcome.

Ideas and musings

Following on from my last post, You want another chapter?!, I’ve been running over some ideas as to how I can take my short story, The End Solution(click here to see, go on….) further. Comments are always welcome.

Our hero is just about coming to terms with his new lot in life. As a man who knows who is going to commit a serious crime by just smelling them he could use this to his own ends. Why don’t you rob this bank and I will ensure you get away with your crime? He is stupidly strong as well so this would be easy for him. He could do this a few times and disappear for good. He needs to feed on the chemical to keep himself alive (which he discovers later on) and could easily feed on the people after they’ve robbed the bank for him.

Our hero discovers, after becoming very sick and desperate, that he needs to feed on the chemical to keep himself alive. I could explain how he goes about this and how it makes him feel.

Our hero goes back to his family who then become fugitives themselves for housing him. The mother sides with him and the father tries to turn him in. In effect he breaks his family apart and ultimately escapes again anyway.

Our hero becomes the countries hero. He goes around sucking the chemical out of those who need it and becomes a household name. He embraces the government and so on.

This is what I have so far. Let me know your thoughts.

You want another chapter?!

So, like I said in my last post (Oh what to add in and what not to add in) I uploaded a short story to protagonize.com to see if I could get some feedback on it. Sure enough, one person gave the story 4.50 out of 5 rating which was awesome. But this one person also did something which got my head buzzing as well; they put a page marker on my story. This means that there awaiting the next chapter.

What next smeggin chapter?! It was only supposed to be a short story! Panic ensues as I throw things in the air and roll around on the floor. I could do with hoovering up this place?

However, out of this worry came more ideas. I’m currently in the planning stage of the next chapter of this story. It is a vampire-esque fable and I’d like to expand on that aspect first before the political side of the story. Maybe I should show how our hero and/or villain feeds with his new found powers?

As always, if you could have a read and give me your thoughts it would be most appreciated. The link is on my last post.

Oh what to add in and what not to add in.

Going over my story is beginning to do two things.

One its allowing me to build on a story I’m proud of which I like but two it’s also having me rethink all parts of it and I’m beginning to worry it’ll never get finished. Though this is all part of the process I suppose. The main thing is how I can use the mountain of the title a lot more. Any suggestions would be appreciated.

Anyway, I’ve received some good feedback so far and I’ve also put another story up on the website progonize(which is awesome by the way). Take a look if you will and feel free to comment either there or on here.  The End Solution

Cheers

The book I’m working on.

Ok. Best start as I mean to go on.

I’m currently working on a fantasy story about a small town thats at the foot of a huge mountain which itself has a dark forest at its foot. Bugbears live in this forest and will sometimes attempt to attack the townsfolk. They would succeed if not for the dedication of the hunters given the task of stopping them.

The story looks at the hunters themselves, five in total, who defend the townon a daily and nightly basis keeping the bugbears away. It also looks at their lives when they’re not hunting and the continued attempts by the Mayor (A very sleazy and smiley man with a slight pot belly and red cheeks. He dressed very brightly which usually included a yellow tartan waist coat and, unfortunately, a matching hat.) to make money out of the town for his well being and potentially, at the whole towns expense.

I’ve written in that the bugbears are scared of the humans, which is why they don’t attack more often. I’m not sure whether to have more hunters involved from the start or not as I’ve implied there’s an unknown number of bugbears in the forest.

Any thoughts would be appreciated. (but if they’re abusive then they won’t be)