Chase scene baby!

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I’m currently in the midst of writing a chase scene that will come before the final battle which will end my current story (as mentioned a bit in my last post)

The hero of the piece is currently chasing after two of his fellow searchers (hunters of demons) who are after the main demon villain of the piece. The hero has had to fight off some other demons and make sure another searcher (who had been seriously injured) is ok.

Now I need to get my hero across the city of manchester to the final battle ground. I’m trying to get across how fast he is going and what he can see, hear and feel. I also want to convey how passers by are seeing him. Its not been easy so far.

I’ve said that the hero is seeing everyone around him as blurs and how the wind is hitting his face. He is a demon searcher who has enhanced physical traits (speed, strength, agility etc) along with being a former police officer.

I’ve asked this before but does anyone have any suggestions? I’ve had some help (cheers joan) but am looking for somemore.

As always any help would be awesome.

Cheers

Another draft of a short story of mine.

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This is another draft of my take on the vampire myth entitled ‘The End Solution’. I have posted one draft before in a previous post if you feel like comparing them.

Feedback would be awesome. Thank You

End Solution.

This attention following my unwanted rise to fame is running me ragged. They keep coming thick and fast even though they swear they mean me no harm. How can riot police scream such a phrase? I’m sure they can’t find me in here. I need to take my mind off this so I can relax and try to recover. I’ll do my usual trick. But I think I’ll commit my rebirth to this note book I took from them. I’m not about to let them get away with anything. Once I get things sorted, they’ll be sorry they ever tried to stop me.

Work was what it was; Nice but a bore. I could do everything on my team without really thinking about it which is standard when working in administration for over a year. The internet became half of my working day as a result. I was always just biding my time in that place. There’s only so many times you can be told something will come around so keep up the good work before slowly beginning to lose your will to live. Though thankfully my friends help me stay alive.

“Hey, Avenly. Get some work done! I don’t pay you to look at the news.’ Peter said this usually once or twice a day when ever one of the higher ups walked passed. He would then come over and read the news with me closely followed by Amanda and Mark. We were close friends and had had many a good night out together. I tried to go and see them but no matter how much control I think I have, it still isn’t enough. I watched them have a drink a few weeks ago before Amanda turned round and clocked me. I managed to run away before she came out to find me.

What the government has done to me fills me with a mixture of anger and hope. Anger that they would do such things to normal people just because they were different and feel they have the right to and hope because I can use what they did to me to put the country right. I realise the power I have but all I need is a complete plan. I can smell the ones that need to be killed but do I go at it randomly or in some kind of order?

The day I was created always goes through my head along with those bloody news reports. They established long ago that each person who committed a fatal act had a chemical in their blood that facilitated such an act. The tests they ran on the volunteers, who turned out to be criminals that were forced into it for their freedom, conclusively showed that this chemical could be removed and they could re-enter society without any threat to anyone. The volunteers were never freed at all. My visit to the government building to read and take some documentation on the subject some five days ago, which has increased the number of police after me,  showed me that some of them were found to act ‘in an undignified manner’ and were exterminated because of it. The documents show exactly what they did to my creator and the two hundred thousand. I won’t let them get away with this.

From my desk I could see the building where those tests had been conducted and are still probably being conducted now. The question I always had was how would they locate and extract the chemical. I thought I’d be happy knowing the answer, but now that I do and I am the answer, happiness is far from how I feel.

I left work that day and went passed the building to go home. It’s an ominous thing to look at with its Lord of the Rings style two towers that seemed to glare down on people. Every so often the light would catch it and it almost looked like the towers had eyes. I continued until I saw the crowd outside its main entrance as usual. They were always there trying to get information or complaining about the tests they were doing even though till that point it had clearly made the country a better place. I can see their side of things now.

I glanced up at the windows of the smaller office building that joined the two towers together and saw my creator running wildly through the corridor. I was frozen in shock. I can’t believe that that was all I could do. How small of a man was I until this all happened? I can’t imagine acting like that now.

He blasted through the main doors of the building with a wild and confused look in his eyes. Hair everywhere and whatever wasn’t covered by hair was covered by blood. People were screaming and running but I just couldn’t bloody move. I wondered why he was in such a state which gave him enough time to reach me. I tried to move but his grip was too much. His eyes seemed to say that he’d chosen me as he jumped and easily knocked me to the ground. When I tried to get him off me with my meagre strength he looked me in the eye and I couldn’t and still can’t really believe it. Was that happiness in his eyes? Like he was happy to attack me? I know now that he was. Still in shock I allowed him to bite me and though it lasted only a minute I felt its effects immediately.

It felt like he was sucking and blowing on my neck. Taking blood out and putting it back in again to mix it with mine was what it was. When he jumped off me I could feel it course through my body immediately and I had the overwhelming feeling that I was constantly drinking my favourite drink but as I drank my thirst increased. It was as glorious as it was painful. I miss that feeling and the few I’ve fed on so far haven’t come close. I fell to the ground and as I got back up, the feeling changed. A distinct odour filled my nose and made my fingers tingle. It was the same feeling I got whenever I caught the smell of my favourite cake being made or meal being cooked. As people ran past, still screaming and frightened, they all gave off the same odour. I leant against a nearby pole and just took the smell in. It was like nothing I’d ever smelt before. It was the chemical coursing through their veins.

I received a text message from Amanda which said something like ‘Hey Bruce RU ok? I can see people running around. If UR ok, we’re going for a drink in the usual place xx’. I genuinely thought to myself, Why not? I could have one drink and smell my friends. That has to go down as the best and worst thought I’ve ever had. As I casually strolled back through the crowd towards them standing outside work I noticed a few people directing horrified looks at my neck. As far as I could tell the blood flow had stopped but my neck and shoulder were covered along with most of the right side of my shirt. I suddenly felt weak at the knees and then it happened.

Everyone around me became irresistible and I had to suck the chemical out of all of them. I started to run but my knees wouldn’t let me. As I slowly got towards my friends they all smelt the same. The smell became more intense as I got my knees back and ran past them. The worried looks they gave me still haunt my dreams and I think Amanda shouted after me but I’ll never know.

Reports came to light later on, which differ from what I stole surprisingly, said that not everyone that had the chemical extracted had committed a Fatal Act. Two hundred thousand separate cases of people wrongly accused of fatal acts that had had the chemical extracted became completely different people. This quickly fuelled the countries news. But the country showed how fickle it could be when it forgot about the two hundred thousand after the discovery of my existence when the man who had bitten me, a ‘volunteer ‘and my creator was found. He eventually killed himself but only after revealing my full name and who I worked for. I always got teased about forgetting to remove my work badge when I left the building, maybe I should’ve listened.

I now know that I can accurately tell who will and who won’t commit a fatal act. I’m the ‘End Solution’. My creator was a prototype and the ‘End Solution’ can determine who’ll commit a fatal act and deal with it accordingly. They are completely unbiased as the chemical has never ‘Soiled their blood stream’. I’ve never had the chemical in my system so I’d never commit a fatal act which is why he chose me. He was the last experiment to go wrong and when he bit me I became the first one to go right.

They want me to return so badly and will do anything they can to help. I know that if I do return, they will apparently make me a ‘national hero’. All I can see in being a ‘national hero’ is being experimented on no matter how they sugar coat it. I’m not turning out like my creator or the two hundred thousand and why should I? With the power I have, I could rule the world.

I’ve been roaming around now for the past three months. I fed on a few people who had strong chemical smells coming from them and who turned out to be career criminals. I can walk near people, who all smell divine, and not attack them but I can only do this for six hours or so before wanting to drink them all. The only time I’ll be able to return is when I’m in complete control. Whatever they did to my creator has consequently made me gain muscle and my senses are much sharper. Thinking of which, I can smell them again. How did they find me? ‘

It’s getting closer.

Hello

I’ve got myself a (rough) ending to my current novel which always makes me want to write faster and for longer. Though I know that if I do it will go from (I hope) well created prose to disaffected, garbled gubbins. I’ve always liked to write in 1,000 word blocks as this allows me to make a fair amount of progress on my story and let me sleep a little better. 1,000 words is a lot you know or at least getting close to this number would help.

I love this part of writing. I usually have one or two endings in my head for any story I write. And then more often than not when I get to the end I combine these two ideas and then come up with a third which makes up my ending. The current ending I have in mind is mostly made up of numerous fights and chases across a city. Namely Manchester. But I’m having trouble conveying the urgency and speed that I think it needs.

Do you have any ideas on how I can convey these things simply and effectively?

Your thoughts are always welcome. Till next time.

Bye

 

Get rhythm. But how?

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As I try to get back into my writing ways I’m constantly stopped by one thing or another. I think I’ve gotten too used to doing nothing so getting back to it is harder than I’d expected. How do I get my rhythm back?

After November I have gotten into the habit of writing a least 500 words when I write of my fiction. And I also like how when I just keep writing and don’t look up at that dastardly word count, I get to my goal pretty quickly. It also helps that I’m writing some action at the moment which always makes me write faster.

I started to do my Writers Bureau Creative Writing Course again and I’m hoping this will help me get some rhythm back into my writing. I hope this will start a….rhythm of focusing on one thing for a week at a time. Last week it was writing and this week it’s my assignment. And so on and hopefully onwards and upwards.

I’m going to end this blog post now as I’ve made so many spelling errors something’s telling me my brain doesn’t want me to write tonight. I’ll have a go again tmorrow. Or next week.

Cheers

Getting back to it.

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I’ve started to get back into my writing by continuing my NaNoWriMo novel. I’m looking forward to finishing it and getting some feedback (constructive only). Like all my stories I’m proud of this one. But other things have tried to stand in the way of my writing this week.

I’ve recently had to relocate to my old bedroom from the spare room that I’m temporarily in at my parent’s house. They’re wisely changing the spare room so that my sister and her husband will be able to stay over in future along with their new baby (due end of June-early July). Whilst I’m more than happy to do it and about the new arrival, it does take up a surprising amount of time. I’m almost there but I still have a fair amount of stuff to move. But where will it go? I’ve no smeggin idea! It’ll all take shape eventually but when all you want to do is just sit down and write it’s not ideal.

I also contracted the worst form of disease. One that has plagued MENkind for years and has no known cure or equal. A disease so vast in its horror that can reduce a grown man to a shadow of his former self. I’m talking of course…about MANflu!!!

I don’t know where it came from but it stopped me from doing any writing last Friday night and going for a run last Saturday morning. I’m over the worst of it now but a move, a baby and a disease? What else wants to stop me from writing?

Of course I am happy to move and for the new little man or woman to join my great family. But disease has taken down many a man. But it shall not have me!!! And…well I’m ranting now so I’ll leave you till next time with a quote taken from letter I read at work the other day. It has no relevance to what I’ve been talking about but it’s still a good quote. Laters

“Interest, fees and charges are a sophisticated form of enslavement that deprive, exploit and gradually exhaust, short of a kill and not unlike cancer.”

P.S Where do you think I work?

 

 

It’s all coming back to me now.

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I decided to take a break from writing after completing NaNoWriMo. I also said it would only be for a couple of weeks. That couple turned into a whole month. And I’m glad for it.

Though I love to write I also remember the days when I didn’t love it as much. The days when I used to fill my evenings and sometimes days with the pursuits of making my fantasy team good enough on Pro Evolution Soccer on the Xbox. Or managing my own team on football manager. Or watching a film. Or doing absolutely NOTHING!

It was very refreshing to come home from work and then just lounge about until it was time for bed. Doing this allowed my brain to calm down and return to a normal temperature. It also allowed me to miss writing which I haven’t done in a long time. But that is over now and it’s all coming back to me (see what I did? Genius. Or because I watched a Glee episode in which they systematically ruined plenty of Meat Loaf songs and one in particular has been my head for days)

I started again by writing the story that I had almost finished when I took part in NaNoWriMo (I have recently received my t-shirt to confirm this in the post. Bit chuffed I must say)  I’m around four chapters or so before the end and it didn’t take me long to pick up from where I’d left off. I had to read the last four pages again which I’m glad was what it took to reignite me as reading over 50,000+ again sounded daunting.

It’s great to be back to my writing ways and I’m now going to (hopefully) stick to some kind of schedule for 2013. Writing one day, reading and commenting the next then doing my writing course and then anything else I can think of. I’ve missed it really. I prefer to keep myself busy and it will all help to get my writing finished and ready for the good/bad process of editing.

By the way, have you taken a writing break over the festive period? Or when was the last time you took a break from this writing lark?

Laters

Not writing. A good thing?

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After completing the awesome NaNoWriMo last month I’ve decided to take a break from novel writing for a week or two. This is to recharge the batteries a bit and help my back and, for some reason, left bum cheek get back to normal. I’m informed this is what can happen from not having a comfortable seat to sit on or from sitting for too long. Never mind.

It’s been good so far not writing. I didn’t think I’d like it but I know when I start to write again and finish the novel NaNoWriMo helped me start I’ll get right back into it. This break has been a welcome surprise so far. It has allowed me to mull over some ideas for the novel I’m writing and others that I’ve got to finish. Leaves me lots to do when I start to novel write again.

I also received an email stating I’ll be able to get NaNoWriMo winners only offers from tomorrow onwards. I wonder what they’ll have in store. And I now have something else to mull over.

Cheers

 

It’s come to an end.

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So for the last thirty days(ish) I’ve been taking part in the glorious NaNoWriMo (National Novel Writing Month) challenge. It was hard in some parts but I managed to come up with a system. That system was to write 500 words at a time and take twenty minute breaks in between. It makes writing 2000 words a day seem a lot easier. The results of using said system were……

I completed 50,000 words in one month and bought a t-shirt to celebrate!

Now, I got a bit giddy upon seeing the ‘Winner’ title above my name and that’s why I bought the t-shirt but I don’t think it’s too geeky. Well, if it is I’m not bothered anyway. I’m proud of what I’ve done but I just hope an American size medium t-shirt fits me.

The novel is still a few chapters of the end and I’ll be posting some of it at some point. If you’ve ever wanted to write a novel, I suggest you sign up for NaNoWriMo 2013. We won’t regret it.

Bye

Writing Writing Writing

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Sorry I’ve not been updating my blog recently but I’ve been busy with this NaNoWriMo (National Novel Writing Month) thingy that I’ve not had time. Well, I probably have had time but I’ve just been so sick of looking at a PC screen I’ve wanted to do something else.

Don’t get me wrong, I’m enjoying NaNoWriMo immensely and have now written 33,610 words of the 50,000 word total. I have to say I’ve never been so happy with my own writing or what I’ve been able to accomplish.

What’s the novel about john? I hear you ask. Very good question. It’s about a world in which all the really bad crimes (rape, murder, child kidnapping etc) are not done by humans they ate done by demons who frame the humans for it for their own ends. To stop this, the world has demon hunters or ‘searchers’ who search out the demons and kill them. The demons have so far always worked alone but what would happen if they all banded together against the searchers? Can the searchers stop them from taking over the world?

That was how the story started in my head and has pretty much gone like that so far. I’m very happy with it and will share some of it with you once it’s finished.

The word count goal of 50,000 in one month is something different and challenging. Though it does give you focus. I managed to get 6000 words written in a day this past Saturday which I’ve never done before. I wouldn’t have been able to do it if not for NaNoWriMo. If you ever consider writing a novel in future, you should definitely consider this challenge.

Right I’m off to bed. Later